A story from Wednesday, April 20, 2011

Formula Theft

The anti-theft alarm echoes. She fumbles as the baby cries. A formula can falls from her coat. Bystanders avoid her eyes. He offers to pay.

9 Critiques to "Formula Theft"

  1. The following was written by Mike on April 20, 2011

    Wow, this is great! You pack so much action and emotion is such a small space. Well done!!!

  2. The following was written by A. T. Greenblatt on April 20, 2011

    Whole lives created in five short sentences. Well done.

  3. The following was written by Lisa Tang Liu on April 20, 2011

    Thank you so much!

  4. The following was written by Tucker on April 20, 2011

    You create a vivid tableau with so little. This is what makes the whole genre of 140 Fiction great.

  5. The following was written by Kate DeAmour on April 20, 2011

    Wonderful. Vivid. Emotional. Fantastic accomplishment in such a small space.

  6. The following was written by Gayle Beveridge on April 21, 2011

    Well written, stepping right into the action with the alarm, creating the dual crisis of poverty and theft and finishing off with the act of compassion.

  7. The following was written by conrad brown on May 4, 2011

    Well done. Ranks right up there with Hemingway’s “For Sale, baby shoes, never worn.”

  8. The following was written by James Driscoll on May 4, 2011

    Very nice. So much told with so few words, especially the human condition.

  9. The following was written by Lisa Tang Liu on May 12, 2011

    Wow. Thank you for the high praise. Hemingway is one of my favorite writers.