A story from Wednesday, June 15, 2011

Quality Time

He wasn’t supposed to take a five year old to the bar. “Damned cute!” Coins dropped to the floor for me to grab. I tattled when we got home.

5 Critiques to "Quality Time"

  1. The following was written by Juliana on June 15, 2011

    I can smell the peanuts and hear the rasp of a bar stool scooting over the beery laughter– awesome job, Ames!

  2. The following was written by Maya on June 15, 2011

    Oh, I love this. The title adds a zing!

  3. The following was written by Rose Gardener on June 15, 2011

    Instant scene setting, characters both identifiable by their ‘flaws’ and a full story arc. What more could you ask for? Super-duper stuff Amy!!

  4. The following was written by Amy Tripp on June 16, 2011

    Jules, Thanks so much for reading and commenting. You’ve awesome. :)

    Maya, Thank you!! I’m so glad you enjoyed this.

    Rose, Thanks so much! I really appreciate you reading and commenting on this!

  5. The following was written by Jennifer K. Oliver on August 10, 2011

    This is lovely. I’ll bet a lot of people will be able to relate to it! It’s amazing how you create such a strong atmosphere and show the kind of relationship in so few words.