A story from Monday, March 7, 2011

Last Again

His cheeks burned as the line of boys dwindled. In the outfield, daydreams of ninja skills brought a grin. The baseball fell at his feet.

3 Critiques to "Last Again"

  1. The following was written by Milo James Fowler on March 8, 2011

    Superb; you’ve packed a whole story into these three lines. Well done!

  2. The following was written by Robert B on March 21, 2011

    I believe you have captured my childhood in 140 words.

  3. The following was written by Steve Ramey on April 5, 2011

    This evokes experience with economy. Bravo!