A story from Thursday, December 22, 2011

White World

Snow steadily falls over the region, wrapping around everything like a blanket. The children are delighted, happy the snow is finally here.

4 Critiques to "White World"

  1. The following was written by @faerieknight on December 22, 2011

    Awesome Jan – way to go :D:D

  2. The following was written by MrsMica on December 22, 2011

    Nice, but I’m a bit meh about the word snow being used twice in such a short piece

  3. The following was written by Janis Monroe on January 5, 2012

    Yeah, I agree about using the word snow twice in a short sentence. Of course, now after my piece is published it is when some other choice phrases come to mind that could color things up. Thanks for the critiques.

    • The following was written by MrsMica on January 5, 2012

      Haha, I know how that is!