A story from Wednesday, October 12, 2011

The Bus Ride

Pressed against a stranger in the bus, I felt a knot on my breast—soft, small and secretive. I missed my stop for the first time that day.

5 Critiques to "The Bus Ride"

  1. The following was written by Amy Tripp on October 12, 2011

    You have me wondering what the knot was….

  2. The following was written by Gayle Beveridge on October 12, 2011

    The imagery for love at first sight is well written.

  3. The following was written by Radhika on October 13, 2011

    Thanks for reading my story and telling me what you thought.

  4. The following was written by Amy Tripp on October 13, 2011

    After seeing Gayle’s comment, I think I was going to literal in trying to understand this. :)

  5. The following was written by @mindchirp on October 14, 2011

    Must have been a long ride. And uneasy on mind.