A story from Thursday, September 1, 2011

Stories

On his deathbed, a father that had abandoned me asked for stories of my childhood and his grandchildren. In my anger, I told him everything.

6 Critiques to "Stories"

  1. The following was written by Evert Asberg on September 1, 2011

    Your few words say so much. Well done.

    • The following was written by Robert Craig on September 3, 2011

      Maya,

      All critiques are welcome, of course. How would you handle implying the relationship between them? Thanks in advance for any suggestions you may have.

      Rob

  2. The following was written by Maya on September 1, 2011

    Hmm, sounds like the father got an earful! Good job! I would try to imply the abandonment rather than telling it directly. (Yes, I know it is easy to offer critique to others. :))

  3. The following was written by Gayle Beveridge on September 1, 2011

    Your small story deftly describes the strong emotions of abandonment and of revenge. A very powerful tale.

  4. The following was written by Amy Tripp on September 2, 2011

    Very well done. You gave us a whole world in 140 characters – multiple emotions and feelings. Great job!

  5. The following was written by Robert Craig on September 3, 2011

    Thanks for those great comments, and for reading the story.