A story from Tuesday, August 30, 2011

Pablo’s Shoes

Pablo lost his only pair of shoes in a fight. His mother would never understand. He limped home, looking for flowers along the way.

3 Critiques to "Pablo’s Shoes"

  1. The following was written by maya on August 30, 2011

    Pablo sounds like a sensitive soul forced into a just fight against the wishes for his loving but stern mother. You have captured the character traits into a few well chosen words.

  2. The following was written by Gayle Beveridge on August 30, 2011

    Your story, though by necessity, short, has a great deal of depth. We know Pablo is a strong character, not shying from a fight, that he is injured, ‘he limped home’ and that he cares what his mother thinks.

  3. The following was written by Amy Tripp on September 2, 2011

    I hope the flowers soften Pablo’s mother. Very well done!