A story from Thursday, December 16, 2010

New Family

He arrived to pick them up from the hospital. Her room was empty. “She said she’s sorry,” the nurse said as she handed him the baby.

10 Critiques to "New Family"

  1. The following was written by Tucker on December 16, 2010

    This packs a heck of a punch.

  2. The following was written by Jeff on December 16, 2010

    Wow.

  3. The following was written by Mike on December 16, 2010

    This one is GREAT! Ouch, ouch. Nicely done!

  4. The following was written by Elisa on December 16, 2010

    Great twist. Loved it.

  5. The following was written by Gayle Beveridge on December 17, 2010

    A very well rounded story with a dynamic plot.

  6. The following was written by S Kay on December 19, 2010

    Great twist.

  7. The following was written by dana on January 7, 2011

    How sad. Well done.

  8. The following was written by susan wiener on January 7, 2011

    That is very powerful! Great!

  9. The following was written by Evert Asberg on January 16, 2011

    Well done! Shocking.

  10. The following was written by Joey Burns on March 21, 2011

    The reality of abandonment at the beginning like that illustrates her lack of strength. So sad.