She’s frightened by the strange badges and unknown hierarchies. Sobs silently in the toilets at lunchtime. “How was school?” “Fine, Mummy.”
You’ve expressed a child’s secret fears brilliantly, I can literally feel the girl’s anguish…and all in a mere few sentences. Well done!
That’s a mighty big story for 140 characters. Nice work!
This is an entire world in 140 characters. Such a brave little fish!
I am so glad I’m not watching anyone go through that!
I am ever an admirer of brevity – and this had poignancy and depth too.
And I thought six sentences was damned difficult. You’ve done a fine job here, Cath. And thanks (shaking my head sideways) for priming my overprimed pump.
Little fish in a big pond, summed up in 140 characters or less
This I will use as an example of how to write a complete tale in 140 characters with my college students–all seniors, which I hope means that none of them were sobbing in the WC during break today. Bravo. Well done.
Pathos in such a tight space. Well done. I’m an admirer.
Thank you ALL! And thanks to One Forty Fiction for a great week.