A story from Friday, September 30, 2011

Life Story

He. She. They. Bliss. Boredom. Betrayal. Court papers. Custody hearings. Canceled visitations. Restraining order. Father’s fury. Shotgun.

5 Critiques to "Life Story"

  1. The following was written by Evert Asberg on September 30, 2011

    Strike home! Probably more true than happily ever after.

  2. The following was written by Amy Tripp on September 30, 2011

    The rapid-fire, beat. beat. beat. of this fit the subject so well. Great job!

  3. The following was written by Gayle Beveridge on September 30, 2011

    The alliteration works well – Bliss. Boredom. Betrayal – Court .. Custody..Cancelled – and coupled with the one or two word sentences not only rushes us to the tragic conclusion but gives it the sharp impact it requires.

  4. The following was written by Jan B. on October 1, 2011

    The staccato delivery is extremely effective. Well done!

  5. The following was written by Sydney on November 21, 2011

    This is wonderfully written! Love it.