He. She. They. Bliss. Boredom. Betrayal. Court papers. Custody hearings. Canceled visitations. Restraining order. Father’s fury. Shotgun.
Strike home! Probably more true than happily ever after.
The rapid-fire, beat. beat. beat. of this fit the subject so well. Great job!
The alliteration works well – Bliss. Boredom. Betrayal – Court .. Custody..Cancelled – and coupled with the one or two word sentences not only rushes us to the tragic conclusion but gives it the sharp impact it requires.
The staccato delivery is extremely effective. Well done!
This is wonderfully written! Love it.