A story from Friday, April 1, 2011

Into Thunder

In the house, voices arc, unnatural lightning. Outside, the dog on point, nose to the screen door; the child holds her breath, counting.

5 Critiques to "Into Thunder"

  1. The following was written by Li Vooght on April 1, 2011

    Gorgeous. You can see the entire scene and feel the various emotions.

  2. The following was written by dana on April 1, 2011

    Love the double entendre of arc!

    And the child’s counting. Wonder what second spacer she’s using: Mississippi, cotton candy, one thousand, bunny ears…?

  3. The following was written by Rebecca on April 1, 2011

    Masterful.

  4. The following was written by Gayle Beveridge on April 2, 2011

    You can almost feel the tension this story portrays; an excellent example of showing instead of telling.

  5. The following was written by Heather on April 20, 2011

    Wow. This made me catch my breath for that little girl. I love it!