A story from Friday, September 21, 2012

Hello Cows

As I walk towards the coop in the gathering dark, four pairs of eyes glow in the beam of my flashlight. “Hello, cows?” I say hopefully.

4 Critiques to "Hello Cows"

  1. The following was written by Gayle Beveridge on September 22, 2012

    Very well written, I can almost feel his anxiety.

  2. The following was written by Love The Bad Guy on September 23, 2012

    This is quite eerie, and very well-written. The word “hopefully” could have been replaced with many others — fearfully, softly, anxiously — but to choose the word you did heightens the feeling of ambiguity and unspoken fear.

    Really well done. :)

  3. The following was written by Alice Carey on September 26, 2012

    I grinned at the ending.

  4. The following was written by Victoria on October 4, 2012

    Thank you everyone for your comments! It was a fun story to write.