As I walk towards the coop in the gathering dark, four pairs of eyes glow in the beam of my flashlight. “Hello, cows?” I say hopefully.
Very well written, I can almost feel his anxiety.
This is quite eerie, and very well-written. The word “hopefully” could have been replaced with many others — fearfully, softly, anxiously — but to choose the word you did heightens the feeling of ambiguity and unspoken fear.
Really well done.
I grinned at the ending.
Thank you everyone for your comments! It was a fun story to write.
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