A story from Monday, May 23, 2011

Happy Birthday

Today was her birthday. She waited for her cards. None came. She sat by the phone. Nobody rang. Today was her birthday, but nobody cared.

3 Critiques to "Happy Birthday"

  1. The following was written by Tucker on May 23, 2011

    So sad. Showcases loneliness without ever having to use that precise word. It might have made the scene just slightly more vivid to readers if some indication was made as to which birthday this was, but at the same time the ambiguity works. This was simple, clean, and effective. I really liked it.

  2. The following was written by Amy Tripp on May 25, 2011

    Very sad, but also sadly true for too many people. Well done!

  3. The following was written by John Tucker on May 25, 2011

    Was her name Eleanor Rigby? 😛