Her eye twitched just like when they played poker and she was bluffing. “Everything okay?” he asked, tossing his brother a beer. Twitch.
Very nice! As good as it gets! Why “critique” this? I’d rather experience it!
Nice one! Well crafted. There’s the whole story compacted into a few words.
Thanks for the comments
LOL! Oh, she had better watch out, she won’t have any secrets! Great job!
Ah, I love it! It’s simple and sweet and I can see the entire little story.
I can see the shaken can exploding when he opens it.