A story from Wednesday, May 18, 2011

Gracie’s Tell

Her eye twitched just like when they played poker and she was bluffing. “Everything okay?” he asked, tossing his brother a beer. Twitch.

6 Critiques to "Gracie’s Tell"

  1. The following was written by Harry Chittenden on May 18, 2011

    Very nice! As good as it gets! Why “critique” this? I’d rather experience it!

  2. The following was written by Mike on May 18, 2011

    Nice one! Well crafted. There’s the whole story compacted into a few words.

  3. The following was written by April on May 18, 2011

    Thanks for the comments :)

  4. The following was written by Amy Tripp on May 18, 2011

    LOL! Oh, she had better watch out, she won’t have any secrets! Great job!

  5. The following was written by joy on May 19, 2011

    Ah, I love it! It’s simple and sweet and I can see the entire little story. :)

  6. The following was written by John Tucker on May 25, 2011

    I can see the shaken can exploding when he opens it. :-)