A story from Thursday, June 23, 2011

Forever Thirteen

Daddy isn’t fair, taking my cell away like that. I’ll show him. When the sleek car pulls up, I reveal my white thigh and wait to be let in.

5 Critiques to "Forever Thirteen"

  1. The following was written by Amy Tripp on June 23, 2011

    Oh! Ouch! That one hurt. Such a scary situation, but really, that’s how many young teens think.

  2. The following was written by Von Rupert on June 23, 2011

    Thank YOU, Amy for commenting. You kind of lead me here. I found this site because Rose posted a link to your awesome Fiction 140 story about the dad and the bar and the tattling–I loved that! (BTW, it’s me, Yvonne from F2K. :) )

  3. The following was written by Kim Tatam on June 24, 2011

    A powerful story. Nicely done.

  4. The following was written by Gayle Beveridge on June 24, 2011

    Great story, great setup, strong ending. The typical teenage girl – quite sad really.

  5. The following was written by Amy Tripp on June 24, 2011

    Yvonne! Yay! Glad you’re here. I saw “Von” and wondered if it might be you.

    Your story is such a punch in the gut – Love it!
    Amy