A story from Wednesday, June 19, 2013


She squirmed. As she does most times. When she wakes, whatever she dreams, she puts it into words. So, I wait.

4 Critiques to "Foretelling"

  1. The following was written by Paolo Jose Cruz on June 20, 2013

    The title suggests that “she” might have prophetic visions of some kind, but I chose to interpret that as a broader metaphor for the creative process.

    I really like the ambiguity of the perspective. Who is the narrator? A loved one? Her therapist? Her editor? The (hypothetical) reader? Maybe all of the above. It works a plenty of levels.

    Within a the prescribed character limit, it conveys both the discomfort (“squirmed”) and time (“So, I wait”) demanded by the creative process, while introducing us to a character with a definite purpose, while explaining how (and possibly why) she goes through with it.

  2. The following was written by Von Rupert on June 24, 2013

    This is a neat one, could mean so many things. Nice ominous tone. I liked it.

  3. The following was written by sonobeus on June 24, 2013

    Thank you Von! Oooo…you think it’s ominous! :)

  4. The following was written by sonobeus on June 25, 2013

    Hello Paolo – I appreciate the critique you’ve provided which opened my eyes to how my humble 140char fiction could be interpreted. The title `foretelling’ does imply simply the prophetic vision of the dreamer.

    The narrator in this case is the dreamer’s cat :)