A story from Tuesday, May 17, 2011

First Kiss

Slowly the would-be lovers leaned in. Contact brought sparks. She jerked back, hurt. “Sorry,” he said, removing the crushed cigarette butt.

8 Critiques to "First Kiss"

  1. The following was written by Amy Tripp on May 17, 2011

    Ack! Funny!!

  2. The following was written by John Tucker on May 17, 2011

    A first kiss – exciting, new, and sometimes not so memorable. Brought a smile to my face. Nice job, Bill.

  3. The following was written by Joe on May 17, 2011

    Major flash of recognition. Know it well. My old love and I both still have burn marks. Nice work. Hot.

  4. The following was written by Tucker on May 17, 2011

    Love this.

  5. The following was written by Kate DeAmour on May 17, 2011

    Nice Bill! Very funny.

  6. The following was written by Jan B. on May 17, 2011

    Ooooeee, baby. It hurts so good.

  7. The following was written by Holly on May 20, 2011

    Well done, Bill. I wanted to read more!

  8. The following was written by Heather on May 23, 2011

    I love this! Very clever. :)