A story from Friday, September 9, 2011

First Day Jitters

I made her a sandwich, washed an apple, and hoped she’d cope without me. She waved goodbye through a gin-fueled haze as I hopped on the bus.

4 Critiques to "First Day Jitters"

  1. The following was written by Gayle Beveridge on September 9, 2011

    I’m not sure if this should be funny or sad; a great effect.

  2. The following was written by Amy Tripp on September 9, 2011

    Wow! That struck a chord. Very well done.

  3. The following was written by Frankie on September 12, 2011

    A child taking care of their parent; the ultimate ‘substitute’ at home. Good reminder of what many do.Well put.

  4. The following was written by Joe Schuster on September 12, 2011

    Wow. This story takes an abrupt turn that stops the reader cold. A powerful piece of work in a handful of words.