After a long night, you took me to my doorstep. It was late. You looked up with your big brown eyes. I fell hard, and I never looked back.
Great job! I am so proud that your writing has developed so that you can be succinct in delivering a powerful message.
Admiring your writing,
This has a nice fairytale feel to it.
It’s happy, yet full of hidden innuendo.
Do we know this brown-eyed boy?
You left me wanting to know more. Is he a friend, crush, or a new boyfriend? Very short but direct message of your feelings.