A story from Thursday, January 24, 2013

Falling Stars

After a long night, you took me to my doorstep. It was late. You looked up with your big brown eyes. I fell hard, and I never looked back.

3 Critiques to "Falling Stars"

  1. The following was written by Holly Harmon on January 24, 2013

    Andrea,

    Great job! I am so proud that your writing has developed so that you can be succinct in delivering a powerful message.

    Admiring your writing,
    Mrs. Harmon

  2. The following was written by Kim McCully-Mobley on January 24, 2013

    This has a nice fairytale feel to it.
    It’s happy, yet full of hidden innuendo.
    Do we know this brown-eyed boy?

  3. The following was written by jessica on January 31, 2013

    You left me wanting to know more. Is he a friend, crush, or a new boyfriend? Very short but direct message of your feelings.