A story from Monday, August 15, 2011

Dad’s Day Out

“Table for four,” John said brightly. His daughter looked crestfallen. His son just sighed and held up three fingers to the waitress.

4 Critiques to "Dad’s Day Out"

  1. The following was written by Amy Tripp on August 15, 2011

    Wow! You created an entire universe and took us into the heads of three characters all with such a small number of words. Bravo!

    But, oh, is this heartbreaking! *sniffs*

  2. The following was written by Gayle Beveridge on August 15, 2011

    Well done. The conclusion of this story is a tragic twist, proving that even a story in 140n characters can tug at our emotions.

  3. The following was written by Heather K on August 18, 2011

    Ouch. This stung my eyes hard and fast with tears. My Papa lives with Alzheimer’s and this 140 word story packs a punch. Superb.

  4. The following was written by Mike Jackson on August 20, 2011

    A powerful story in so few words. A great ending that really tugged at the emotions. A great read. Thanks.