A story from Friday, April 27, 2012

Bad Trip

He took her away on his new boat, gleaming with polished wood and leather. She came back alone, smelling of saltwater and bleach.

4 Critiques to "Bad Trip"

  1. The following was written by Carma on April 27, 2012

    That’s evocative! I love the sensory details.

  2. The following was written by Gayle Beveridge on April 27, 2012

    This is a good example of twitter fiction. It implies a much larger tale, one that has been played out and concluded.The beginning and the end of the story are stated and the middle is there for us to deduce. The imagery of the boat, ‘gleaming with polished wood and leather’ sets the reader up for a surprise. Well done, Jan.

  3. The following was written by LoveTheBadGuy on April 28, 2012

    This is brilliant. Very eerie and powerful.

  4. The following was written by Jan B. on April 28, 2012

    Thanks, everyone, for the critiques! Very much appreciated.