He took her away on his new boat, gleaming with polished wood and leather. She came back alone, smelling of saltwater and bleach.
That’s evocative! I love the sensory details.
This is a good example of twitter fiction. It implies a much larger tale, one that has been played out and concluded.The beginning and the end of the story are stated and the middle is there for us to deduce. The imagery of the boat, ‘gleaming with polished wood and leather’ sets the reader up for a surprise. Well done, Jan.
This is brilliant. Very eerie and powerful.
Thanks, everyone, for the critiques! Very much appreciated.