A story from Wednesday, October 26, 2011

Alone?

Saliva drips from above, coats the back of her neck. She keeps her eyes closed, head down, praying. The house is empty yet she is not alone.

11 Critiques to "Alone?"

  1. The following was written by Amy Tripp on October 26, 2011

    Oh! That gave me shivers. I think I’d be doing more running than praying. LOL. Nicely done!

  2. The following was written by Milo James Fowler on October 26, 2011

    Ewww! Nice.

  3. The following was written by MindChirp on October 27, 2011

    Sending ripples down the spine!

  4. The following was written by Steve Ramey on October 27, 2011

    Great lead-in to Halloween. Really nice.

  5. The following was written by Stacy Post on October 27, 2011

    Ack! Yes, perfect for Halloween. Makes me want to check all the nooks and crannies at home. Well done, Madeline!

  6. The following was written by Madeline Mora-Summonte on October 27, 2011

    Amy – thanks! I scared myself as I was writing it. :)

    Milo – there aren’t many situations where “ewww” is a compliment but this is one of them so…thanks! :)

    Steve – thanks! I’m enjoying this whole theme week.

  7. The following was written by Madeline Mora-Summonte on October 27, 2011

    Thanks, Stacy! Better check in the closet and under the bed, too… 😮

  8. The following was written by Lydia Gray on October 27, 2011

    Creepy! Perfect for Halloween :)

  9. The following was written by Madeline Mora-Summonte on October 29, 2011

    Thank you, MindChirp and Lydia! Glad you both enjoyed it.

  10. The following was written by Sealey Andrews on November 2, 2011

    Wow, really tense moment you’ve created in just a few words.

  11. The following was written by Madeline Mora-Summonte on November 2, 2011

    Thanks, Sealey!