A story from Tuesday, April 26, 2011

Absolution

He blinks through bourbon. The road undulates like a whore’s tongue. He falls to his knees, forgiveness in the beam of oncoming headlights.

13 Critiques to "Absolution"

  1. The following was written by Tucker on April 26, 2011

    Vivid.

  2. The following was written by Madeline Mora-Summonte on April 26, 2011

    Thanks, Tucker!

    This is my first time here at One Forty Fiction and I’m thrilled!

  3. The following was written by Shelley on April 26, 2011

    Your carefully chosen words tell a much bigger story. Nice one!

  4. The following was written by Madeline Mora-Summonte on April 26, 2011

    Thanks, Shelley! Glad you stopped by.

  5. The following was written by Stacy Post on April 26, 2011

    Strong emotion in this piece. Deeply felt.

  6. The following was written by Lisa Tang Liu on April 26, 2011

    Powerful!

  7. The following was written by Gayle Beveridge on April 27, 2011

    A well told story. small yet complete.

  8. The following was written by Madeline Mora-Summonte on April 27, 2011

    Thank you, Lisa and Gayle! I appreciate your comments.

  9. The following was written by Milo James Fowler on April 27, 2011

    Okay, WOW. Nicely done, Madeline.

  10. The following was written by Madeline Mora-Summonte on April 27, 2011

    Stacey and Milo – thanks for stopping by!

  11. The following was written by Jan B. on April 29, 2011

    Strong imagery in this story. Sad message successfully conveyed.

  12. The following was written by Sally Bishop on April 29, 2011

    Nicely done! Love the punch at the end.

  13. The following was written by Madeline Mora-Summonte on April 29, 2011

    Jan B and Sally – thank you so much for your comments!