A story from Tuesday, August 16, 2011

A Developing Personality

He’d had an imaginary friend for weeks. “Where’s Amy today,” his mum asked. “Gone,” he said, “I killed her.” She hadn’t worried, until now.

4 Critiques to "A Developing Personality"

  1. The following was written by Amy Tripp on August 16, 2011

    Gayle, I love the dark little cloud that scuttles across this one. You created a very vivid scene- I could see the deep frown on the mum’s face when she heard her son’s answer.

    I actually giggled at the end line – can I help it that I like dark humor??
    Great job!

  2. The following was written by Jennifer K. Oliver on August 16, 2011

    Ooh, nicely creepy. Really like the tone in this one. :)

  3. The following was written by Jan B. on August 17, 2011

    Killed her??? Agh, his mother must have felt the imaginary arrow (bullet? knifeblade?) in her own heart. “Till now” — those last two words punctuate the story so well!

  4. The following was written by Mike Jackson on August 20, 2011

    A great everyday story of a youngster with an imaginary friend but with a really worrying twist. A great read.